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spelling, and other conventions. Editing is usually the very last thing you do before you
finalize your piece, looking carefully for any errors that you tend to make. The following
are suggestions for you to consider as you finalize your essay. writing workshop

Revising

Oftentimes, revision can be more effective when you discuss these questions with a
partner.

• Look back at your claim. Since you wrote this early on in the workshop, does it still
relate to the argument you wrote? See Revision Workshop: Effective Thesis and
Essay Structure (p. 000) if you need more assistance.
• Look back at the personal experience you used as evidence. Is it detailed and
evocative like Mckesson’s story of being bullied? Is it relevant to your claim?
Are there places in which more personal experiences would make sense? Review
the Skill Workshop at the beginning of this chapter (p. 000) if you need additional
ideas.
• Look back at your other evidence. Does this evidence balance out and effectively
bolster the personal experience? See Revision Workshop: Appropriate Evidence
and Support (p. 000) if you think that you need help with this aspect of your
argument.
• Have a you made attempts to address the main counterarguments for your
position? Have you refuted them successfully? Are you fair and ethical in how you
refute their arguments? Review Chapter 3 (p. 000) if you have trouble identifying
and refuting counterarguments.
• Look back at your body paragraphs. Have you balanced the evidence with your
own commentary about how that evidence supports your claim? See Revision
Workshop: Balanced Evidence and Commentary (p. 000) if you need more help
with this part of your essay.
• Evaluate your organizational structure. Is it clear enough for the reader to follow?
Are there other approaches to the organization that might be more effective? See
Revision Workshop: Effective Transitions (p. 000) or Revision Workshop:
Effective Topic Sentences and Unified Paragraphs (p. 000) if you think that your
reader may have trouble following your essay.
• Does your introduction hook the reader and provide context to understand the
claim? Does your conclusion include an appeal to pathos and a call to action?
If not, consider looking at Revision Workshop: Effective Introductions and
Conclusions (p. 000).
• Are your language choices appropriate for your purpose and audience and as
effective as they could be? See Revision Workshop: Improved Syntax (p. 000) or
Revision Workshop: Improved Diction (p. 000) to further develop your style and
voice.

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